Thread:GunjiBunny/@comment-3270170-20160514194139/@comment-1674153-20160514231657

When writing an artifact page, you are telling a story. It doesn't have to be overdone, but you are presenting a piece of history manifested into a single object. So yes, make more details about who the Viet Cong really were, the context of the Vietnam war, the impact that the explosion had. But to be honest, this one's idea isn't awful. I dare say it's fine.

But it suffers from word vomit. The description of the artifact, and indeed most of your pages have this problem, looks like an elementary school essay for how much it just spits out at you.